Saturday

The Sculptor

He felt so high when she was at his mercy, now it's over Daniel kneels to stroke her tangled blood drenched hair. Impressed at how this once beautiful face is almost unrecognisable, he picks up the knife from the ground and with passionate movements he carves and reshapes knowing she will make the perfect figurine.
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14 comments:

  1. Marisa Birns27 March 2010 at 13:28

    In a few words you depicted quite well the artist as a mad man.

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  2. Anonymous27 March 2010 at 16:07

    Deliciously twisted

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  3. Unknown27 March 2010 at 17:21

    Excellent work. Vivid and precise with so few words. I'm always impressed by your work

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  4. Marilyn Simpson27 March 2010 at 18:36

    Marisa, thanks for reading.

    Andrew, glad you think so. :)

    Mr. Bone, thank you Sir. ;)

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  5. Unknown27 March 2010 at 21:11

    Beautiful and masterfully done!

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  6. Jodi MacArthur28 March 2010 at 03:42

    Your 55 word horror is fantastic, Mariyln. Sick & gorgeous at the same time. I love the last line.

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  7. Marilyn Simpson28 March 2010 at 11:52

    Thank you for reading, Jacqueline.

    Thanks Jodi. Comments from you always mean a lot.

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  8. Sam28 March 2010 at 18:42

    Ooh, very nice! To get so much into only 55 words is a real skill...which you most definitely have. Vivid and unsettling, does your muse often work like this?! ;)

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  9. Marilyn Simpson28 March 2010 at 19:23

    Thank you Sam.

    Yep, my muse works like this most of the time, just as your great muse like pixies mine like madness. ;)

    Think I need to borrow a pen. :D

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  10. Anonymous29 March 2010 at 15:28

    Terrifying and vivid.
    well done.

    N

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  11. Marilyn Simpson29 March 2010 at 20:49

    Thank you Neil. :)

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  12. Throg Niemand2 April 2010 at 00:07

    Let's see if my comment sticks this time.

    This is a superb piece. Powerful imagery and a great example of "showing" not "telling" which is a bloody miracle in only 55 words.

    Maybe we should think about a collection of some of our better flash fiction pieces.

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  13. Marilyn Simpson2 April 2010 at 13:53

    Thank you. :)

    Yep, sounds cool to me.

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  14. Anonymous9 August 2010 at 21:05

    I liked this one too. Very tight. Not a wasted word. You have a great sense of Micro.

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